From my first draft my corrections were: - Add Ken Burns effect on certain shots to create movement on them and add more 'life' those shots. - Trim 1:48 because it looks like my performers are waiting to be told to begin by the producer(me). - Change summer '19 on the polaroids to summer '91 to help the narrative be clearer. - Add more footage of the older woman because the narrative is not 100% clear and may be confusing to viewers who do not know my idea. - Fill the dead time, that i have of the teenagers dancing, with more shots of the older women. This will also help the correction above. How I changed these: - I was unable to add on the Ken Burns effect on the editing software I was using so this correction could not be completed. - I changed the polaroid shots from summer '19 to summer '91. - I also changed many of my shots around and took out some of the dancing to create space for shots of the older woman. I included the older wo...